Finally, I got back my first writing assignment. I liked what I saw on my marked paper =)

Here's the reproduction of my assignment:

Cacophony

Forget about the honking from the roads, drilling from the construction site, or even wailing from the baby room, the noisiest sounds I hear is in my own head. Dozens of random thoughts flash through my consciousness every moment, from recalling yesterday's delicious dinner, to worrying tomorrow's tedious examinations, to even contemplating today's clear blue sky. The disharmony of the words in my head never seems to stop. I am disturbed by the fact that my mind is constantly in a whirl of emotions. True peace seems to be so far away. Fortunately, I am advancing towards finding my inner peace, by being mindful about myself. I learn that the peace of mind is acquired not by the ignorance of distractions, but by the awareness of thoughts. Not by suppressing unwanted noises in our heads, but by embracing the flow of thoughts in our minds. I learn to withdraw, listen and observe myself to savour the joy of living in the present. With that epiphany, I begin to enjoy the harmonious symphony playing in my mind, perhaps for as long as it may last.

Comments from tutor: "A-"

I was expecting a B+ and hoping for an A, but nevertheless 'in between' is good enough for me =) Too bad my tutor did not write any comments for my work. Perhaps she's too busy with others.

I am really thankful for the following people who has helped me to look through my writings. The 'A-' belongs to them too! Thanks loads to my da jie, Vanessa, Yihui, Ju-Lyn and Pin Xiu! (The thing I dislike about acknowledgements is the innate possibility of leaving someone out unintentionally. Hopefully I haven't this time. >.<)

Please feel free to comment on my work too! =)